"St." <dot### [at] dotcom> schreef in bericht news:488ce96f@news.povray.org...
> Hey all, I was just going through my submissions for the TC-RTC and looked 
> at this image for the first time in ages. And I'm like: "What? I did 
> that?"
>
>   I'm glad I did look again because I can see that the pistol isn't right 
> in the hand. There are other flaws too like the veg is too uniform, rocks 
> too uniform, etc.
>
>   But, I'm proud of this image. I remember what I went through to produce 
> it, heh.  :)
>
>   Can you spot anywhere else that I need to improve it?  (Your eyes are 
> better than mine!)
>
>     If I can, I want to update it. Just looking for other ideas atm.
>

Hi Steve,

This scene is incredible because of the time-freezing aspect it shows. It is 
The Matrix, and yet different in a subtle way, with the (slow) motion 
rendered here, and all that in one single stills image.

 That said, there are, of course, the issues you raise. The trigger is not 
pulled, so some repositioning of the fingers is clearly needed. The rocks 
and vegetation need some more variation. The explosion of the opponent's gun 
has a bizarre color, imo, and perhaps you should show more clearly the track 
of the flying gun by redesigning the smoke trail. I suppose that the trail 
should show up more linear and not like a bunch of spherical blobs. Its 
relation with the initial explosion should also be made more obvious.

The conforming clothes may have their own specific issues. Poser 5? The 
creases look a bit synthetic, but that is not too big an issue. I suggest 
you revisit the textures however and look at the normals you use for them. 
The end result is a bit too granular for a cloth. You could try a bump_map 
of a fine weave. I have done that and the result can be very satisfying. 
However, for the fine linen of the shirts, this will probably not do and I 
suggest to leave the normal altogether out for them.

The pose of the gunman in front, is not entirely realistic. Weight should be 
concentrated on his (stretched) left leg, while the right leg should be 
slightly bent, with the foot turned outwards. The hips therefore should be 
slightly tilted to achieve this pose. Try this out youself (in front of a 
mirror). You will see that the present pose is very unconfortable to fire a 
gun accurately  :-)

The position of the witnesses, just behind the firing gun, seems a bit 
awkward. Maybe you should move at least one of them, to the right?

Maybe you could do something about the atmosphere to make it look more like 
dawn (rosy tint?).


Sorry, Steve!! This is quite a lot of comments, not implying criticisms, but 
things that look "wrong" to me, at least. However, I made them because I 
believe that this scene is much worth the improvements, whichever ones you 
select or not. I am looking forwards indeed to the next version.

Thomas

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